fragile frames hold loads heavier than them
odd paths, thick weeds through which they pertain
they have families to feed
nature provides them their need
penury, the trusted friend
never leaves the side
keep on going
sustain and
survive
life
This is a reverse Etheree.Β Etheree is a ten-line poetry ascending in syllable count for ten unrhymed lines. Itβs attributed to an American poet, Etheree Taylor Armstrong of Arkansas. An Etheree should focus on one idea or subject. A reverse etheree is just the opposite, that is, it’s written with descending syllable count.
Shared with Poets United’s Midweek Motif: Survival. The challenge was to speak about survival so that others may listen.
This is one of the best Etheree which I have read so far ! It’s poignant ,real and poetic ! Sab Kuch ek saath- … For me , its Nothing less than magic !
Loved it soul -sis π
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Oh! Now I feel like that it’s good enough.. ^_^
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Loved your way of illustration dear π
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Glad you liked it… π
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Sometimes I simply wonder! How can one develop such a beautiful thought, while counting and maintaining the syllables! I once tried to write a haiku, and was hopelessly lost! Either I was able to continue with the beauty of the verse or the count of syllables. Aur, yaha to 10 lines hain, with decreasing syllables!
Although I was lost in the maze, loved it to the core!
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Thanks…that is a big compliment π
It is just practice, You write such beautiful prose, Rakesh, I’m sure if you ever try your hand in poetry, it would be a great read… π
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Certain things are better left to professionals. I’m fine with my unromantic prose. At least, I don’t have to keep an eye on syllables. Hahahah
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But honestly, your prosaic lines have poetic quality…
π
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Nice idea there! π I think that you should teach literary forms π
And that looks like an inverted pyramid; we should let the mummies know π
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The mummies might curse my blog for inverting the pyramid and causing a severe vertigo…
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But we thrive on the evil curses and invert them π
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Hehe…right… π
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Great Style
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Thanks… π
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Very much correct.
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Thanks!
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I love it how the meaning doesn’t change when read in reverse..beautifully and creatively written !
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Thanks a lot, Najm…yes…that was the effort, glad you marked it… π
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Beautiful illustration of life, Maniparna π
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Thanks, Ravish… π
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Thank you for introducing me to Etheree.
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My pleasure… π
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Strife – so beautifully described….
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Thanks, Ami… π
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Beautifully composed, Maniparna! Amazing form π
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Glad you liked it… π
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That’s so unique form of poem. A tough life.
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Lovely poem.Hats off to you for such a poem that is well composed.
Cheers,
Sriram & Krithiga
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they have families to feed
nature provides them their need
These people are really true warrior to save the nature !! Great words dedicated to those who never speak their words !!
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Unique form of poem.
Very well composed and the feelings well expressed.
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A tough life indeed!
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Powerful. I know many such women who never fail to amaze all of us. Love this poetry form.
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That is a great style of writing poetry….coupled with your thoughts it became even better….penury, the trusted friend…..blew me away….!
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interesting! Interesting! Its sheer coincidence that I have just finished reading Somali’s etheree….shall try this one too
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π .. Yes, I inspired Somali to try this form. I would really love to see a couple of etheree on your blog, too… π
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Etheree!
This is information for me which I had not heard of.
It seems to be interesting and tempts to take a trial of writing a poem on that style.
The way you have written and the topic ans subject you chosen is amazing.
This I feel is an award winning poem; if I had one to give something for that I would have given it you for this.
Maniparna!
Do have a look at my latest Quotes and Poem.
Shiva
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I’m really flattered… π
Etheree is not so well-know form, but I find it very interesting and challenging. Try out the form, I know you can do justice to it… π
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Honest expression always touches the chord…Beautifully weaved!
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Thank you so much, Susmit… π
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I have not heard of an Etheree, Maniparna – I think I will have to give it a try π Beautiful words – our mothers are wonderful people π
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Indeed they are, Andy π
I would love to see an etheree on your blog…I know you can make wonders with the form… π
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i will give it a go π
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Women of the world work so hard in some parts of the world! Your poem makes us realize just HOW hard.
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It is… unthinkable…
Thanks, Mary… π
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Interesting image and interesting description.
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Thank you… π
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People in the “third world” are the ultimate survivors, to me. And often they do it with such grace and humility! Beautiful words!
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I think such people exist everywhere..maybe the type of the toil they go through differ, but the pain and agony remain the same… π
Thank you…
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Agreed!
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π …
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Maniparna – the reverse etheree makes its own point doesnt it? The burden is heavy and yet borne on a daily basis.
powerful poem.
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Thank you so much. π …
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You taught me what an “Etheree” is today, Maniparna. Lovely thoughts about “fragile” persons carrying heavy loads, taking care of their families. This shows how families around the world most of th he time care for their members and nature provides precious sustenance for them. Hugs, Robin β‘
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You have spoken my mind, here π This was exactly the thought behind the words..thanksss a lot… β€
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beautiful
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Thank you… π
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The shape made me think of women carrying loads on their heads…yes it is true hardship and to keep going is admirable..
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Thank you…these women go through a lot on a daily basis…we can’t even think of that!
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A bitter reality of life, wonderfully expressed dear π
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Thanks, Purba… π
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A stark reality beautifully expressed but not fudged or glossed over.
i admire the honesty as well as the style.
First rate, Maniparna
big hugs
john
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Oh..these words really mean a lot to me…:-)
thanks a lot and hugs… π
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People like us complain about superficial things, when what we should be doing is being thankful for what we have! Such sights are always heart wrenching. And you have done a fab job, by penning it down so beautifully dearie.
Hop on to my blog and grab this Liebster, the pleasure shall of course be mine π
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Yes, I think we should be thankful to the Almighty for having a good life, hale and hearty… π Thank you so much, Leena…hopping to grab the award..yay…:-D
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An extension of what Chaitali said, you really are talented π Keep going!!!
Nothing beats the hardship of tribal villages. They are neglected most of the times by the govt.
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Oh..you people re giving so much stress on ‘talent’..I might actually start to think am really is… π
They have to work day and night and you are right. Though we have SC/ST/OBC laws and reservations, people who actually need it most, never get it…
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Hahaha… Actually you are really talented. One of the multi-talented people I have met in my life π You sure must have been the top marks scorer in your school&college life.
Those reservation laws are useless. Just there for some other reason I guess.
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Feeling on top of the world..you are tooooo generous…:-)
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I am honest π
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Haha… see the error… π
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Aare that happens. It just shows that you are trying π
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Oh yes friends who stand by are friends indeed..
But hard work some have to go through daily .. How they manage to do I have no idea ..I don’t know if I will be able to do so. .
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Same here, Bikram! I’ve no idea how they manage it..I can’t even think of such hardship and toil!
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And we complain when the maid decides to take the day off.
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….or when we have to walk a distance with the shopping bags in our hands…
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How talented are you, trust me! Keep it going friend.
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Thank you so much for the good words…you are too generous.. π
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Excellent metaphor for life situations when seemingly fragile people are required to shoulder heavy responsibility. I find this formof poetry very stylish.:)
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True..and still life goes on..or they drag through the days..:-(
I would like to see you working with the form… π
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Maybe sometime π
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Dunnit π
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It always amazes me how people carry such heavy loads, sometimes on their heads. I am so soft, I complain carrying a small weight. Women especially work so hard in this world. Loved your etheree.
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True…we can’t even think of such toil and hardship!
Thanks a lot Sherry for dropping by… π
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I would not know what to do with a sack of grain, but I might create something with a mess of greens, roots, bark, berries, and nuts–once. But everyday? And carrying water too? And no money or anything to buy? These women have my total admiration.
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Exactly…I admire them too for these very reasons! Thanks, Susan.. π
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That is both very clever and beautifully expressed Maniparna – many congratulations.
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Thank you so much… π
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Gorgeous etheree Maniparna π
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Thanks, Sanaa π
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It’s always amazes me to see these sights, wow!
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Thank you…This is from a tribal village…the women especially, work rigorously to earn a living…
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That they do whew π
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