She knew the dark alleys of his heart
She knew no longer her name was etched
In ivory light.
She knew bidding adieu was like
Closing the door of her sand made castle
With an iron bolt.
So she sat and watched the waves
Counting the numbers as they come
Drowning a single memory
With each one.
And, countless they were
(but so were her chimeric dreams)
Finally, she stopped, but the waves did not
Cascading wildly
In her bleeding heart!
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Loved but Lost
Lost But Loved
Shiva
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Looking for some inspiration bedtime read before I end my day and I’m glad I stumbled upon this treasure! Thank you for such a well written piece.
Just want to tell you I enjoyed it very much.
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Hi Kelly, sorry for the late reply. Akismet put the comment to the trash and, had to recover it.
Thanks for your words of appreciation, I’m so happy you liked it 🙂 Welcome to my blog…
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You’re most welcome. Don’t be shy, come by MiddleMe to say hi!
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Haha..nice rhyming..:-D I’m already in… 🙂
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Haha! Just a coincidence. And I do hope you enjoy yourself in there.
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Sure… 🙂
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How well you have potrayed the pain and anguish felt by one bearing the brunt of lost love and betrayal maybe.
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Thank you, Somali 🙂 Hope you are enjoying your trip… ^_^
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One of your best poems that i have read till now. Loved it so much dear ❤
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Aww..I’m so happy..coming from a person who writes wonderfully, it means a lot…. ^_^
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deep… touching… hugs for you 🙂
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Thanks my friend… ❤ 🙂
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So touching, painful… and lovely! You were able to replicate the anguish of a broken heart through your words!
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Thanks so much…glad you liked it… 🙂
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Fallen yellow leaves
Weeping wind in forest cries
Autumn’s fecund tears!
Hope this is a haiku!
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Oh! It surely is…and, I must say it’s a beautiful one… 🙂
I would love to see a haiku on your blog… 🙂
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Nice poem. 🙂
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Thank you… 🙂
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that is a cool view 🙂
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Thank you… 🙂
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“.. Like closing the door of her sand made castle with an iron bolt…”
That line…Wow!!
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Thanks…I’m flattered… 🙂
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Because she.”.knew the dark alleys of his heart” …because she knew him so well she could know that her name was no more etched
In ivory light.
Love is just a dream. Chimeric sand castles…ret ke gharonde
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Indeed…true love is something hard to find… Thank you Alka for stopping by… 🙂
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I can relate. You relate it off so well.
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Thank you… 🙂
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Hey hi 🙂
Loved this …
“Drowning a single memory
With each one.”
& was wonderful reading you after this long; long time 🙂
Hope you doing great !!
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So good to hear from you after a long time…:-)
I’m doing fine and hope you are having a great time, too…:-)
Happy Diwali….
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Happy Diwali to you too 🙂 God Bless!!
Yes, I am going good & here after a break..
But I have to tell you this..
its wonderful to be back amidst you all !! I mean; you people rock and support someone like me; like hell !!!
Thanks yaar !!! For all this kindness 🙂
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And you are a great support to all of us, …. 🙂 Thanks to you too… 🙂
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Oh…”I” support you all??
I never knew that !!
Thanks for that info 😀
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Yeah.. sometimes we do good deeds without even knowing it… 😛
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Oh Lord..!!
No more comments !!! 😀
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Hahaha… 😀
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Perfect picture to match those words. I hope she finds love again or other way around 🙂
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Thank you…I love this picture and the place where I clicked this… 🙂
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this is so beautifully sad…
very touching.
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Thanks, dear… 🙂
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Brilliant. Love each and every word:)
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Thanks so much, Vishal..:-)
Have a happy and safe Diwali… 🙂
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Very well written, loved it!
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Thank you so much… 🙂
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This feels like the very best of fairy tales – when you know the hardship and the wait for that one redemptive moment
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Thanks for stopping by and sharing this wonderful comment… 🙂
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coming to terms with the loss of love is always a struggle,
a struggle that needs to be won if we are to survive emotionally and move on..but the memories endure.
A fine offering, Maniparna
big hugs
john
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True that…the memories remain and they often make us bleed emotionally…
Thank you so much…:-) Hugs…
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drowning memory with each waves..nice words…::)
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Thanks a lot… 🙂 welcome here … 🙂
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Emotional poem and an intriguing photo. Loved it!
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Thanks a lot, Meera… 🙂
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Closing the door of her sand made castle With an iron bolt.. a fabulous image.
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Thank you….glad you liked it… 🙂
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“…like closing the door of her sand made castle.” I know that feeling……..powerful emotions at such a time.
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Indeed….thanks a lot, Sherry… 🙂
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I really felt, what you felt through your words, its never a good thing when it happens…we learn though, that some times it is one sided, and in closing the door though it takes time…what does not kill you makes you stronger. Written beautifully and genuine even if it was because of a sad moment. It shows the realness of your heart! Hugs!
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Thank you so much for such a wonderful comment. You’ve rightly summed the feelings I tried to convey here… 🙂 Hugs … 🙂
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I really like the idea of being able to drown a memory with each wave. Excellent imagery really…..and so nice to see you at Poets United.
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Thank you so much…:-) Great to know that you liked it…..
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Better to have loved and lost.. than never to have loved at all.. the concept is so vividly portrayed here in your verse. Beautifully executed.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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Indeed… you said it! Thanks a lot, Sanaa… 🙂
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Wow this is purely beautiful! amazing
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Thanks a lot… 🙂
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