Four friends, Som, Sakshi, Meena and Abhi are spending their summer vacation in a small hilly town of Uttarakhand with their parents. The children are of age 12-14 and are close friends. They love wandering around the hillslopes in the morning and afternoon.
Nice script!!
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Nice fiction. I found it interesting and sweet to play from a group of actors.
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Thank you… 🙂
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I was imagining something along the lines of Famous Five. That’s a nice twist at the end 😀 The children must have been relieved too!
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Hehe…yes. A school play it was, so, no violence… 😀 😀
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Haha, I loved this. 😂
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Thank you… 😀
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Love this Maniparna! I always enjoy your stories.
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Thank you…so glad to know you liked it… 🙂
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Mani, as always fascinating to read your stories and anecdotes you keep bringing out in between your series of poems and those intriguing few liners on beautiful pictures that you capture. This story of yours is strikingly simple and profoundly gripping, and the choice of words and the way you have crafted the scenes are perfectly apt. I was also visualizing the worst and was fathoming out the contours of reactions and how you will handle the end with such deadly scene in front of children. With your master stroke you played your beautiful cards and the red color did the trick and the basket of painter’s kit made the canvas literally full…
I agree Mani, never easy to craft story for children, and it is not just handling the complexity of any plot but also the choice of words and the way the paragraph and sentences needs to be subtly framed and systematically phased so as not to break the flow and at the same time give the compact form that such short story need.
Thanks for such a delightful story.
And it is monsoon time and I am sure your hand must be itching to write and eyes must be twitching to capture the natures’ drama and we are all waiting for your rendezvous with rainy season.
😀
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Thanks so much, Nihar. Yes, truly I find writing for children most challenging. I’ve written a few in Bengali but it’s not an easy job.
Haha…yes, you are right. Monsoon is in full swing and I’m enjoying it. Will surely write something… 😀
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I agree Mani writing for children is not a child’s play and it needs the hard nut to crack to get the soft side of the writing for the tender mind. Writing in mother tongue is where the thoughts get the most natural flow and there is a subtle feeling that comes when we read a story in our mother tongue…unfortunately our primary language have got rattled with the onslaught of the foreign invader, and the English is in the commanding position.
Looking forward to your oodles of wisdom dropping from the cloudy sky…
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I absolutely agree that writing in the mother tongue is always special, it gives you a natural comfort… 🙂
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Indeed, its the power of nature we ignore to nurture.
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Of course ,my macabre mind was envisioning some unfathomable horror! Lol. Artists can seem like a guilty bunch with their crimson paint. Enchanting, Mani! How sweet to know you’re a teacher. 😘
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Haha… even my creepy mind wanted to make it something terrible 😛 But then I remembered the instructions of the higher authority, no real violence for children’s play… 😀 😀
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Maniparna, this is fantastic! You are truly gifted. If you don’t write professionally, you should be!!! Many blessings to you. 🙂 So glad to know you. Love to you – Debbie
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Aww…thanks a lot for your encouraging words, Debbie. I was away for a while and so the late reply. Hope you are doing great… ❤
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Wow it’s nice👍
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Thanks a lot… 🙂
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Those kids sound very adventurous and good thing it was just a painter in the end. When we are younger, our imagination runs wild so easily. What will be bad will be bad and what us good will be very good 😂 Lovely short story. Very engaging ☺
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Thank you, Mabel. Yes, as a child, our imagination knows no bound… 😀
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Lovely story with a nice ending!
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Thank you… 🙂
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Interesting turn of events!!!
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Thanks. It was meant for a school program and so I didn’t make it full of actual murder and blood… 😀
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Interesting story with an intellectual twist. Loved it a lot.
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Thanks, Jyotirmoy. Kemon achho?
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Motamuti bhaloi achhi,
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Good story Maniparna
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Thank you… 🙂
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You are welcome Maniparna
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🙂
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Oh! What a positive twist! I was thinking of a murder mystery being solved by these adventurous kids. Nice script Mani.
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Thanks 😀 I wanted it to be a murder mystery but we were told not to spurt blood as it was enacted by kids… 😀
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So sweet! Nice turn of events.
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Thank you… 🙂
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