Tanka: Lost

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opulent décor
festivity in the house 
chandeliers dazzle
even the darkest corners
sans her vague smile, forsaken

 

This is my second attempt to write a tanka, the first one was written more than a year ago, read it here.

Image Credit: rock.genius.com

77 responses to “Tanka: Lost”

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  2. Wow Maniparna.. Very beautiful Tanka.. I also have written some haikus and Tankas and I know how difficult is to fit the words by symbols in lines and give a meaning to them.. Loved the last line here.. Have a great day.. 🙂

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  3. Beautiful tanka, Maniparna. But I prefer haiku because it gives more rooms to reader. I see tanka as shortest renga written by a single poet. I think it would be more fun when it’s written by two poets as linked poetry. Just a thought 🙂

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    • Thanks, Ravish, great to see you after a short break. Hope you’re doing well healthwise. 🙂

      Yes, though I’ve never participated in writing a collaborative poem as renga, but it certainly is a good concept. Needs time though, which I lack…

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  4. As beautiful as sad ! Materialistic pleasures can not replace the genuineness of happiness from within – we know, but we fail to understand.
    thank you for giving me such a deep thought written so well in this style 🙂

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  18. Nice pic 😛 Her smile would light up even the darkest corners you mean? 😛 😛

    Well, glad to see you hop around between Haiku’s and Haiga’s and Tanka’s and poems and short stories and product reviews and book reviews and …..

    Have a good day!

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  21. I don’t know much about tanka, but I loved the feelings ringing in it, in spite of the uneven syllables. The despondency in the presence of the opulence presents a stark contrast and increases the misery. A black dog looks darker in a herd of white sheep.

    Very beautiful and introspective!

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    • That was exactly the intention, to make her smile even more miserable in te midst of expensive decoration… 🙂 That’s why I created the contrast. And, often we have pain behind our smiles, something unsaid or unseen ..we have to wear masks… 🙂 .

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  23. Maniparna you have beautifully encapsulated the words “dazzle and the vague smile” and the expression depicted in the lovely face into tanka and it reflects the real emotions and true expression in its myriad hue and color…
    😀

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