The silence of the night was perturbed by the hoot
The raucous cry shivered the forest
The wide soft wings fluttered in the dark
Dilly-dallying to catch the prey for the night.
All the inmates of the wood knew
That the rodents were no longer safe
Surreptitiously the nocturnal bird
Plunged down and made his day.
Quite a dark poem….liked it
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very vivid capture of the moment!
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Such a beautifully penned poem, Maniparna!! It has all the elements of a night forest …:)
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a very living picture of the owl world….impending doom is so pronounced in ‘raucous cry’, forest’s
shiver and the inmates’ apprehension…..very nicely sketched Maniparna…
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Nice lines which evokes sensual and visual feelings. Owl symbolizes so many things in different culture around the world. đŸ™‚
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How scary it must be for the rodents when they hear that hoot!
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I very much enjoyed this. At first I was disturbed by the use of perturbed, but came to see why you used it. If I were you, I would just work on the last line. It’s nearly right for me, but just not quite to the standard the poem deserves. Hope you don’t mind me saying.
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Not at all đŸ™‚ I believe that criticism helps one to improve her/his ways. Thanks a lot for your suggestion . I’ll try to keep it in mind next time.
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Beautiful đŸ™‚
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Thanks Deepa đŸ™‚
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So evocative…”the wide soft wings fluttered in the dark”.
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Thank you. Happy to know that you enjoyed it đŸ™‚
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Great work again!
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Thanks Indrani đŸ™‚
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The owl’s moves and sounds, from the one that made the forest shiver and the fluttering wings to the plunge, truly make this poem.
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Thanks a lot Susan, for your appreciating words đŸ™‚
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first stanza ends with night and second with day! Creatively crafted (y)
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Thank you đŸ™‚ you’ve rightly pointed out the contrast đŸ˜€
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Beautiful – just true to your style.
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Thanks Abhra đŸ™‚
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Nice & Creative!
Powerful Imagery. đŸ™‚
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Thanks a lot ..:-)
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Yes indeed, Maniparna! Remembered that Owls use ‘Echo-location’!
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Indeed đŸ™‚ ..Thanks Anita
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“All the inmates of the wood” That is a nice line, more frightening the more I think about it.
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LOL..thanks.. hope you’ve enjoyed it đŸ™‚
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I can feel the night and almost touch the Owl, Well done,
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đŸ˜€ thanks …
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Yes. They do what they must – “shivered the forest” I really like that.
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Thank you Margaret đŸ™‚
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